Long time ago, in ancient civilizations, smoking started. In the beginning smoking was part of religious rituals, as a way to contact the spiritual world, but as time start to pass; smoking became more pleasure than ritual. Nowadays smoking is one of the most effective social tools but also one health issue. Smoking is one of the bigger killers in the world today; it kills approximately 500,000 humans per year only in the United States. It is considered one of the most important causes of premature death and cause a lot of sickness and health issues. When you smoke you inhale the gas in to your lungs, this is one of the more effective ways to deliver drugs into your bloodstream but its also a way to introduce more substances that main result harmful; harming your vascular system and making you prone to cardio and vascular diseases as: vascular stenosis, heart attacks and chronic obstructive pulmonary disease this without mention lung cancer. This means that smoking may be a principal part of people's social life’s but it’s also ones of the most dangerous social tools at long term use because of all of his health issues.
Nice writing. Clear topic sentence but itseems to me you forgot to develop the first idea and concentrated exclusevily in the second. Correct the mistakes I highlighted and include the developing of smoking as a social issue. Don edit your entry, write a new one and if you can, add a picture you feel related to your paragraph.
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