jueves, 31 de marzo de 2011

Essay paragraph 2: Young people is caught in a materialist society.

Nowadays we live in a society dominated by images and appearances, and we, the young people, are caught in this society making us do anything to have a great image. The society each day is turning more materialist. All the people is more interested in what they have rather than who they are. This affects even the industries and the economy of a nation. As indicated; the people go to the stores without the intention of buying the best and the good quality stuff, they buy the stuff that gives a better look. Sometimes this things are expensive and the people is so obsessed of being part of this society that even fall in deep debts to look cool. This affects all the society without mention the young people, that are an easy catch. The young people´s personality and their character isn´t matured and is easily influenced. We, the young people, just want to feel accepted by the group and if this means we need to make something to look cooler we may do it. And by cooler we mean anything that give us a better image or an appearance that may help us out-stand the group or just be part of it. Some persons justify that is not young people responsibility the stupids acts they do, they said that they´re part of their learning experience. This isn´t true. Although their acts are part of their learning experience, they are their responsibility. In conclusion, the kind of society we´re living in help the young people do stupid things, and make them think that life is about the image you project but this isn´t true at all, and after all the things that are going to give young people strength in their life's are the things they abstain to do.

1 comentario:

  1. Rewrite your paragraph so I can see a clear Topic Sentence with 2 or 3 controlling ideas. Then, develop your paragraph accordingly. It is not that the one you wrote is bad but it is disorganized and lacks support.

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